Comments on: p.264 (Chapter Nine)

By: cwDeici

cwDeici — Wed, 14 Nov 2012 10:32:06 +0000

What a civilian way to put it… expendable…

By: Rockphed

Rockphed — Mon, 18 Jun 2012 19:40:22 +0000

Their reasoning for their no-weapons policy is sound. Or at least thought out. Running around in their shirt sleeves on a world they have not yet surveyed is just sloppy.

After all, how many times did Kirk et all get stuck on a planet because they beamed down in shirt sleeves rather than wearing space suits and enacting a quarantine.

By: Patrick

Patrick — Wed, 13 Jun 2012 02:21:52 +0000

This the first time the font has not overpowered the dialogue and I could just enjoy the story.

I like the hair-as-panel-border. It has a nice art nouveau feel to it.

By: Roy

Roy — Wed, 13 Jun 2012 01:47:29 +0000

Excellent. Even my old eyes can read it!

By: wandering-dreamer

wandering-dreamer — Tue, 12 Jun 2012 23:42:07 +0000

Muuuuuuch easier to read, I think that did the trick!

By: Tara

Tara — Tue, 12 Jun 2012 21:23:24 +0000

OK, here’s what it is: physically, the only thing that has happened to her hair is at some point her braid came undone (actually, you can see this happening early in the chapter). Visually, the crazy hair represents her currently skewed grasp of reality. Related to this is this section’s lack of panel borders and any kind of balloon to surround Aria’s inner dialogue.

I expect this visual metaphor will be more obvious in a few more pages, or when you have a chance to read this chapter (once it’s finished) all in one sitting.

By: Jeremy

Jeremy — Tue, 12 Jun 2012 21:09:44 +0000

By the way, what happened with her hair?

By: Insectoid

Insectoid — Tue, 12 Jun 2012 19:01:51 +0000

This is much easier to read—thanks!

Poor Aria. Not to mention, poor Patty! Patty must be suffering some sort of adverse reaction to the… trenat? …she got from the Miesti she swatted in chapter 4.

By: Tara

Tara — Tue, 12 Jun 2012 18:33:42 +0000

The curved and lowercase words are the Miesti speech, and the straight and uppercase words are Aria’s thoughts. This is the same pattern as what I used on previous pages, but the difference is I substituted normal-looking “s”es for the tall thin ones I used before.

Sorry about the confusion!

By: Torjin

Torjin — Tue, 12 Jun 2012 17:50:42 +0000

sure – that’s Aria thinking
but, yes, the focus on the lettering also got me confused for a moment