Comments on: Chapter 5 p. 138

By: Tara

Tara — Tue, 23 Feb 2010 14:42:40 +0000

*laughs* much as we may want it, we can’t be princesses all the time.

By: Ben

Ben — Tue, 23 Feb 2010 03:41:16 +0000

I’d recommend visually letting the smoke out of the probe as a detail of panel 3 maybe?

This is getting really juicy! love it! It’s great that you are letting your male side influence this story appropriately with some relevant and realisticly appropriate violence! It compliments the story nicely and makes it more real instead of coming off as princesses tiptoing about in the universe, feeling groovy without getting their hands dirty! Male readers especially will be enjoying this current plot!

Well done!

By: J. Wilde

J. Wilde — Wed, 17 Feb 2010 07:16:15 +0000

Perhaps more obvious sparks coming from the probe would make the damage more clear, or no sound fx at all, and a panel later as Vessa examines the probe and then it buzzes/makes sparks? With the probe currently in point of contact against Farmer Vorhees' head, it really invites the taser comparison.

By: Kev

Kev — Wed, 17 Feb 2010 00:25:13 +0000

Way to go, Patty! Time to pull out a zany hat to celebrate

By: Insectoid

Insectoid — Tue, 16 Feb 2010 23:56:54 +0000

Heh… I just now noticed the butterflies…

By: Insectoid

Insectoid — Tue, 16 Feb 2010 21:41:15 +0000

Silly me. With the holiday I totally forgot that today was Tuesday!

Ahem… Patty’s alive!! YAY!

J.Wilde @1: Heh.

Tara @6: Yeah, “fffzzzt” does sound better.

By: Christopher

Christopher — Tue, 16 Feb 2010 21:36:10 +0000

Wow. Patty’s not dead. Any other “alternate universe” casualties slated for a longer than a red shirt life span?

By: Tara

Tara — Tue, 16 Feb 2010 18:05:00 +0000

Maybe “fffzzzt” for the sound effect? Does that sound more like a piece of electronic equipment giving up the ghost?

By: Tara

Tara — Tue, 16 Feb 2010 18:03:00 +0000

Heh, yeah… that was a script error– I changed the arm that was hit when I was drawing it a few pages back, and then forgot to change the script to match. Duh. I’ve already been called out about it on the Girlamatic site, which, frustratingly, only seems to be broken for some people, at random. I don’t know what to do about that, as it is beyond my control to fix.

The arm, however… well, it’s one of those errors that will definitely be fixed in the printed volume, and whether or not I fix it on the website will depend on how much it bugs me (which is starting to be a lot). Thanks for catching it!

By: Hans

Hans — Tue, 16 Feb 2010 17:32:49 +0000

I’m reading this since it runs on Girlamatic and came over because the updates are still not visible. I really love Galaxion – it’s a good-natured and well-paced story!
Nitpick question: Why does she hold her left arm and says that the right arm is broken?